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Chronicles of the Sentinels – Legacy excerpt

Hi everyone!

I continue to find it difficult to pick a passage to post on here, because I always want it to be something interesting, but I don’t want to give away the best parts of the novel!

For instance, I had thought about avoiding any excerpts that revealed what Emmi’s powers were, but then I remembered I had already revealed that in an early article about Chronicles.  So today’s excerpt comes from chapter 12, and is one of many chapters from Emmi’s perspective :)

Image source - Google Images
Image source – Google Images

To those who weren’t already following my blog when I revealed it, Emmi’s powers grant her the ability to transform into animals.  I’ve heard different terms for this, including shapeshifting (but to me that suggests more than just animals) and animorph, which is actually the name of a sci fi series.

Anyway, in this scene, Emmi has been exploring the Sentinel facility in the middle of the night.  When the leader of the Sentinels, Tom, nearly catches her in a part of the facility she isn’t allowed in, she turns herself into a cat, and hides in one of the labs.  The excerpt picks up just after Tom leaves the lab.  Emmi is hiding under a shelf behind several bottles of cleaning solvents.

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Curiously, she found she could hear his boot steps for a long time, and she realized that her cat ears gave her better hearing. It was definitely a perk, and would allow her to sneak around a little easier.

After she was convinced he was far enough away, she slipped out. Her tail brushed up against a nearly-empty bottle and knocked it over, and when she heard it fall, she jumped three feet high in fright!

When she had collected her wits, she slowly made her way out of the lab. She stayed close to the wall, and felt like she was walking on the tips of her cat toes. She felt her ears move in various directions as she picked up tiny little noises. The novelty of moving ears made her want to smile again, and once again her new body translated that into a purr.

She investigated each of the open labs, and her curiosity intensified. The cliché ‘curiosity killed the cat’ came to mind, but she humorously thought to herself, but satisfaction brought her back. And besides, I have nine lives now.

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There you are, a quick peak into Emmi’s experience as a cat.  I hope you all liked it!  I feel like these peaks and glimpses into the world of Chronicles barely does it justice, but it’s still fun to post them and hear what everyone thinks of them :)  So please, comment below and tell me what you think!

Thanks for reading,
-Jon

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Chronicles of the Sentinels – Legacy

Hi everyone!

Last night, I finished the 2nd revision of book 1 of the Chronicles of the Sentinels!  :D  This was an exciting milestone, because it means that I finally, finally get to share the novel with others!

Every single milestone in writing a novel is exciting to me, and as I’ve said before, the actual writing stage is my favorite.  However, the idea that new eyes will get to read the story is so exciting to me!  What will they think about it?  How will they interpret it?  All of the subtle little subtext I put in, will they see it?

Most of all, I hope that it sparks the imagination of those who read it.  I hope they finish this relatively short novel and go “That was exciting!  Where’s book 2?”

In fact, I’ve already sent my novel out to I think 8 beta readers (and am about to send it to a 9th :) )  I am so excited and looking forward to seeing their responses!!

The Titles of Chronicles

As you can see from the title of this blog article, I finally came up with a name for the 1st book, simply, “Legacy.”  I reserve the right to change that, of course, but I think it fits the story nicely :)

More than that, I kind of have some ideas for titles for all 3 books by keeping to the simplicity of it.  So while every novel’s title will begin with “Chronicles of the Sentinels,” the individual book’s title will be 1 descriptive word.

I don’t want to reveal all of the titles right here, for a couple of reasons, not the least of which is I may change them after writing the novels.  Also, there is a certain hype that comes with revealing a novel’s title, so I want to save that for when I’m hyping the 2nd and 3rd books :)

So, book 1 is officially called: Chronicles of the Sentinels – Legacy

What next?

Well, for starters, I wait for beta readers to finish and give feedback.  I hope to hear back from at least a couple of them before the writing conference.

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Image Source – http://www.rmfw.org/

The next milestone is the Writer’s Conference in September, and for that, I need to start researching how to pitch a novel, and start practicing!  2 weeks isn’t a long time to figure out how to do something I’ve never done before.  However, if I continue to treat this as part of the writing process, IE: put hours into it every day, I’m confident I’ll be ready :)

Do any of my fellow writers out there have any advice on pitching a novel in person?  What are your experiences?

Oh, and before I forget, the numbers from revision #2!

Chronicles of the Sentinels – 3rd Draft by the Numbers

There may still be some revisions after I get feedback from beta readers, but here it is, as polished as I can make it right now :)

Word Count: 72,970
Page Count: 226

That’s almost 100 words more than the 2nd draft, so there was a net increase.  Interesting since there were, in some cases, whole sentences I removed, others I tightened up.

Thanks for reading, everyone!
-Jon